(Link) Nice, very well-thought-out robot porn. You've put a lot into the method of copulation and it comes off as very believable. I'm especially pleased that you acknowledged the inability for a Transformer to be choked to death, and managed to have a creative BDSM scene revolving around a very unique form of damage that he could do. Finally, the interaction between the two was true to the characters and entertaining to read.
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(Link) Thank you so much!
Yeah, I wanted it to be quite clear that choking by itself wouldn't do much other than hurt. I wasn't sure whether my "this would hurt a squishy, but not a TF" sentence sounded silly and out of place in there, but I needed to make it clear that he was doing something that was emphatically not the breathplay that human readers would immediately think it was.
I'm glad it worked, and thrilled that you found them in-character and enjoyed reading it. Again, thank you.
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Date: 2009-11-17 02:05 am (UTC)From: [info]ianam1983
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Nice, very well-thought-out robot porn. You've put a lot into the method of copulation and it comes off as very believable. I'm especially pleased that you acknowledged the inability for a Transformer to be choked to death, and managed to have a creative BDSM scene revolving around a very unique form of damage that he could do. Finally, the interaction between the two was true to the characters and entertaining to read.
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Thank you so much!
Yeah, I wanted it to be quite clear that choking by itself wouldn't do much other than hurt. I wasn't sure whether my "this would hurt a squishy, but not a TF" sentence sounded silly and out of place in there, but I needed to make it clear that he was doing something that was emphatically not the breathplay that human readers would immediately think it was.
I'm glad it worked, and thrilled that you found them in-character and enjoyed reading it. Again, thank you.
Do you mind if I copy your comment over to my DW, just so I have a record of it there too?
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Sure, go ahead!
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